Monday, April 5, 2010

Net Addiction

Net Addiction










A lot of people enjoy surfing the Net.They look for interesting Web sites and chat with
people all over the world. However, some people spend such (so) many hours online
that they are internet addicts. Although an average person spends about eight to twelve
hours per week, but an addict spends eight to twelve hours per day online. Because
addicts spend so much time interacting with the computer so (that) their lives are
negatively affected. They become social recluses, because they stop going out and
talking to people face-to face. They avoid real- life social situations , preferring instead
to be in a dimly lit room with only the glowing screen to light up their lives.
Internet addiction affects not only the addicts themselves but also the people around
them. For example, John's marriage to Martha broke up until (because ) he insisted on
spending so many hours on the Net. As soon as (wheneve ) he arrived home from work,
he was at his computer. While (After) he finished dinner, he would disappear into his
computer room again. He paid so little attention to her, that she finally divorced him.


Since college students are especially technologically skilled, they can easily become
nonstop Net-surfers. Most colleges provide computers around campus, so that students
can use them at any time day or night. As a result, students can spend too much time
surfing the Net instead of "surfing" their textbooks. Last semester, nine freshmen at
Berkshire College flunked out although (because) they became internet addicts. In
short, even though the Internet is an excellent source of information and entertainment,
but we must not let it take over our lives.


In red : errors

In green : corrections















3 comments:

  1. Hi Liliana
    I saw your work, But I suggest that in line 7 you change it to while instead of but and as soon as instead of whenever.

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  2. Hi liliana, im very interested in the way you did your corrections. its very organized and i think its the best way to do it. ill look foward to see you in class and to see your presentation. byee

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  3. Hi Liliana,
    I think for the sentence 7 you should remove but. The rest of the coorrections you made are correct.
    See you soon.

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